Here's my newest cartoon. It's called "Frankenshopper".
http://home.earthlink.net/~jtn1989/hiyaanimation/id90.html
Enjoy! My team and I worked hard. I'd appreciate some feedback ;)
James :cool:
Here's my newest cartoon. It's called "Frankenshopper".
http://home.earthlink.net/~jtn1989/hiyaanimation/id90.html
Enjoy! My team and I worked hard. I'd appreciate some feedback ;)
James :cool:
How big is the file?
Question on your site, it's about animation, but there are no thumbnails or graphics, the only thing you have there makes it look like a tech site. Time to rethink.
Pat Hacker, Visit Scooter's World.
That's not bad. My comments and critique echo each other--it's got some promise but it needs more:
- You've gotten some good expression out of very minimalist character designs...BUT... you need more angles beyond the 3/4 heads you've got there.
- Your the shots have a nice variety, in terms of breaking things up with close-ups , etc. but the layouts are mostly straight on and the action only moves side-to-side. You could work the Z-axis a little more. More dynamic angles and some zooms as well as pans.
- I think the concept is pretty funny and the interaction between the doctor and assistant is fun...BUT...there's no rising action. It just kind of ends. You need a middle part with the "shopping monster" doing some monster shopping that builds to some climax.
- You're obviously really "going-for-it" in your vocal performance, and I admire that...BUT...I think you need to consider casting other actors for the other characters. It's really challenging to execute distinctively different characters. Not everyone can be Mel Blanc. Just getting a good variety of voice characterizations in there would lift this up several levels.
- Lose the subtitles/sluglines at the beginning. You don't really need them (unless you expand their role into some kind of running gag).
Hope that helps.
Ted Nunes - www.tedtoons.com